From 0ce382d86889921989a1888524f59945d595be62 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Linus Heckemann <git@sphalerite.org>
Date: Mon, 8 Apr 2019 21:45:33 +0200
Subject: [PATCH] rl-1903: pantheon notes phrasing/organisation

---
 nixos/doc/manual/release-notes/rl-1903.xml | 36 ++++++----------------
 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 26 deletions(-)

diff --git a/nixos/doc/manual/release-notes/rl-1903.xml b/nixos/doc/manual/release-notes/rl-1903.xml
index 3821fa59e47..893608cbbcd 100644
--- a/nixos/doc/manual/release-notes/rl-1903.xml
+++ b/nixos/doc/manual/release-notes/rl-1903.xml
@@ -31,37 +31,21 @@
     </para>
     <note>
      <para>
-      <varname>services.xserver.desktopManager.pantheon</varname> default
-      enables lightdm as a display manager.
+      By default, <varname>services.xserver.desktopManager.pantheon</varname>
+      enables LightDM as a display manager, as pantheon's screen locking
+      implementation relies on it.
      </para>
      <para>
-      This is because of limitations with the screenlocking implementation,
-      whereas the screenlocker would be non-functional without it.
-     </para>
-     <para>
-      Because of that it is recommended to retain this precaution, however if
-      you'd like to change this set:
-     </para>
-     <itemizedlist>
-      <listitem>
-       <para>
-        <option>services.xserver.displayManager.lightdm.enable</option>
-       </para>
-      </listitem>
-      <listitem>
-       <para>
-        <option>services.xserver.displayManager.lightdm.greeters.gtk.enable</option>
-       </para>
-      </listitem>
-     </itemizedlist>
-     <para>
-      to <literal>false</literal> and enable your preferred display manager.
+      Because of that it is recommended to leave LightDM enabled. If you'd like
+      to disable it anyway, set
+      <option>services.xserver.displayManager.lightdm.enable</option> to
+      <literal>false</literal> and enable your preferred display manager.
      </para>
     </note>
     <para>
-      Also be aware that we haven't enabled lightdm with Pantheon's greeter by
-      default. That's because it has numerous issues in NixOS and isn't optimal
-      for use here yet.
+     Also note that Pantheon's LightDM greeter is not enabled by default,
+     because it has numerous issues in NixOS and isn't optimal for use here
+     yet.
     </para>
    </listitem>
    <listitem>