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1 If you are in need of help, you need but ask...
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2 ************************* INSTALLED: 9 DEC 85 ***********************
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3 Welcome to BWMS (BackWater Message System) Mike Day System operator
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4 ************************************************************
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5 GENERAL DISCLAIMER: BWMS IS NOT RESPONSIBLE FOR ANY INFORMATION
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6 PLACED ON THIS SYSTEM.
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7 BWMS was created as an electronic bill board. BWMS is a privately owned
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8 and operated system which is currently open for use by the general public.
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9 No restrictions are placed on the use of the system. As the system is
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10 privately owned, I retain the right to remove any and all messages which
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11 I may find offensive. Because of the limited size of the system, it will be
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12 periodically purged of messages. (only 629 lines of data can be saved)
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13 To leave a message, type 'ENTER' and use ctrl/C or break to get out of the
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14 ENTER mode. The message is automatically stored. If after entering the
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15 message you find you made a mistake, use the replace command to replace
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16 the line. To exit from the system, type 'OFF' then hang up.
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17 Type 'HELP' to see other commands that are available on the system.
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18 ************************************************************
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19
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20 >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>END REACHED AT THE TOP?<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<DON'T BE
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21 SILLY - EEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHOOOOO!
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22 """"""""""""""""""Drat! So close... SOLI
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23 GOR CAMERAS AND LENSES AT YOUR NEAREST
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24 PHOTOGRAPHY SHOP. BUY TODAY!
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25 """""
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26 \\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\THE DESTROYER\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\26
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27 When he did wake up, he found that he didn't want to. The darkness was warm, comforting. And there were no
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28 dreams.
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29 When he opened his eyes he found himself in a high tech hospital room. He tried to move but nothing worked from the
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30 neck down. Then he noticed a faint blue glow around him. A paralyzer. To keep him from moving and reopening any
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31 wounds. That was also why he didn't feel any pain. As long as the thing was on, he was stuck there. Probably just as
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32 well. He closed his eyes again and sleep took him surprisingly fast.
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33 Seconds later (it felt like), he was reawakened by a noise. He opened his eyes and saw a figure in a doctor's long
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34 white coat. His back was to James but when he turned around James recognised him immediately. "Oh, boy." he said in a
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35 weak, rasping voice, "I knew it. I died and gone to hell."
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36 The doctor responded with a sour smile. "And greetings to you, too. Sorry to hear your sense of humor hasn't
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37 improved any."
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38 "I like my humor the way it is. How's it goin', Putzie."
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39 The doctor winced at the hated nickname. "I have a name. I would appreciate you using it."
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40 "Excuse me, intern Willerd Putzner."
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41 "Doctor Putzner."
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42 "Doctor! This place has lowered its standards. Never mind. Where's the Old Man?"
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43 "He'll be in later. You're not his patient this time, anyway. You're mine. It took three hours to repair the
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44 severed nerves and muscles in your back and most of our available blood supply to keep from losing you while I did it.
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45 And then I spent another five hours refixing that mess beneath your jawline. Whoever fixed it the first time did a
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46 lousy job."
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47 "I was rushed."
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48 Doctor Putzie was was more than a little skeptical. "YOU fixed it?!"
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49 "Yeah, I'll tell you about it later. The girl I brought in with me. How is she?"
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50 "Oh, she's fine. In a lot better shape than you are at the moment. She was suffering from some type of powerful
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51 nerve toxin. Fortunately our lab boys figured it out pretty quick and she recovered in about forty eight
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52 hours."
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53 James tried to turn his head to look around. "Where is she?"
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54 "Well, no money, no relatives around here... I put her up at my place."
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55 "What!?"
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56 "Don't bother to thank me. It was my pleasure. I've been showing her the sights around town. She's a delightful
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57 girl and I'm really enjoying getting to... know her."
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58 "You son of a-"
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59 "I said you didn't have to thank me. The expression on your face is thanks enough. You're getting a little
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60 overwrought, and I'd hate to see you undo all my nice work. You better get some more rest."
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61 Before he could object, Putzie reached over to a long gray machine and hit a switch. James was unconcious
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62 instantly.
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63 \\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\THE DESTROYER\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\
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64 (((*)))(((*)))(((*)))
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65 L'homme: It is an STD bus with 8in drives. Thank you for helping me.
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66 (((*)))(((*)))((( Ripple )))
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67 ((( of the brook )))
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68 ((( the songs of the larks )))
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69 ((( Yes, I remember all those things )))
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70 ((( but tell me please, will you: )))
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71 ((( Why I couldn't remember your name )))
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72 *************************************************************************
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73 Mister Smirnoff I presume?
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74 **************************************kathyD********************************
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75 HELP
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76
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77 FA LOVERS
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78 88888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888
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79 IT is indeed comforting to be able to once again walk the streets of
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80 downtown Portland and seldom see a Prostitute, thanks to the outstanding work
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81 of Mayor BUd and Chief Penny. But now I find I can't venture out my apartment door,
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82 without encountering muggers and even murderers...is this such a great improvement for what once was
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83 the most livable city?
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84 You should try LIVING downtown some lifetime. Better than an INfocom game.
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85 IT is really discomforting to decide which is lesser of two evils:
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86 Prostitute
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87 or
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88 Subtitute (faggots, as in AIDS)
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89 I don't know where in downtown you are referring to but the hookers are there. Muggers? Murderers? Downtown? Not really
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90 unless you are the kind of un-street-wise person that looks like you are afraid of something. I lived in downtown for more
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91 than 8 years and noone ever mugged me. And I am not a big guy. I just know how to survive on the street. You should learn
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92 or else stay OFF the street.
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93 off
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94 There has been a resurgence of violnt crime in the area of Portland bounded
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95 roughly by the river, Burnside,21st and PSU in which an average of two viloent
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96 crimes are commited each and every nigt.
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97 There was also a man stabbed repeatedly near SW14th and Hall last week who
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98 lay where he bled to death for many hurs before anyone even noticed or cared
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99 ennough to call the police to report it.
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100 Maybe it's nothing where you're from but here it seems things are indeed
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101 gettin significantly worse.
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102 Read the Oregonian...it's there. Everyday.
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103 ?c
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104 ______________________________JD 2446408.9998______________________________
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105 violEnt,averEge,viOlEnt,hOurs,enough,gettinG,commitTed. Not good, Lennerd. %%%%%%%%%%%%%BACKWATCHER&&&&
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106 <><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><>
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107 "God rest you merry merchants may you
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108 make the yuletide pay!" (Tom Lehrer)
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109 <><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><>...psu-cs!nelsons<><><>
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110 .-.-.-.-.-.-.EmuLurk.-.-.-.-.-.
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111 exit
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113 Have you ever had one of those days when the first thing you do is
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114 expect to work a full shift and then all the power goes out. Maybe
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115 Hmmmm..... Looks like the power went out again, eh?
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116 +_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_
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119 |||||||||| Argh! Early-morning shifts! I can't stand it!! |||||| PEN NAME |||
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120 ppppppppppppppppppppp (first time in a week I haven't seen line 629!ppppppppppp
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121 lnhq......................................................................lnhq
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122 Does any one out there think that our friend Taxi ^H^H^H^H^H Lewis would do
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123 well with a one dollar Kamikaze??? Fifteen minutes and counting...
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124 Slum......................................................................Lord
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125 _~_~_~_~_~_~_ODX_~_~_~_~_~_~_
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126 The statistics prove that Portland is one of the worst per capita crime areas
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127 in the COUNTRY. Although perhaps it is only in reported crime because it's
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128 hard to imagine it being any more dangerous than New York City, where walking
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129 on the street at night feels like a life-threatening adventure.
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130
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131 But my feeling is that Bud and Penny (don't their namesjust say it all?) are
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132 just too liberal and weak-minded to crack down on the impotant stuff, and
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133 the crooks, who are generally not so liberal, feel inclined to take advantage
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134 of the situation. I love women, but to be a woman in charge ofthe police takes
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135 someone a lot tougher than some chick named Penny.
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136
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137 Portland, after all, one of the worst in the nation? Seems unreal, but it's
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138 true. And to the joker who thinks because he's never been mugged that crime
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139 is rapant in our city...
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140
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141 You're just plain stupid.
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142
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143 +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+oh well, just my opinion +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+
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144 did I say crime is rapant? Of course, crime isn't rapant, although it is, but
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145 he thinks that... oh forget it...
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146
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147 rampant rampant/... arrrgh!
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148
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149 @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@SSC@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
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150 Valinor: You're writing is very good.
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151 Delta V: If your battle between you and Valinor would be decided by writing
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152 talent alone, I'm afraid Valinor would have you roped before you got into the
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153 hotel.
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154 Smirnoff: verbose? Do people really talk that way?
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155 Destroyer: Writing is fine, but perhaps we're all growing weary of it. Maybe
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156 an ending is due soon?
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157
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158 @@@@@@@@@THE SELF-STYLED CRITIC@@@@@@@@@@@ (Those who can't do, criticize@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
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159
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160 (((*)))
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161 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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162
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163 TSSC: Thanks for your comments. I appreciate them. Hopefully, I'm
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164 not battling anyone. I just like to write. I stepped on enough toes around
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165 here a couple of years ago.... I'll try to restrain my enthusiasm this time
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166 around.
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167 Mohammed Wassir
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168 <The Friendly Albanian>
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169 !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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170
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171 You Can Go Home Again
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172
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173 The mist hung over the mountains like a gossamer cover,
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174 gripping the trees and the road in its silky embrace. It was just
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175 like he remembered, just like it always was, coming though the
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176 Cascade Range towards the coast.
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177 'Nothing changes. Even after all these years the mountains
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178 still look the same.'
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179 Ten years ago, Ben Clausen chose the fast life of the big
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180 city over rural existence in the small Oregon coastal village of
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181 Cooper Bay. Now Ben had changed his mind. He was returning to
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182 the land of his birth. He wanted to go home.
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183 Ten years. The thought would not leave his mind. 'I've been
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184 gone so long, shat will I find there now? Hostility or open
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185 arms? Can things ever be the same again?'
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186 Through the help of a realtor friend in New York, Ben had
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187 put the down payment on a small cottage with a beautiful ocean
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188 front vista. At least that's what the blurb in the listing book
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189 had said. It was expensive, but money was the least of Ben's
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190 problems.
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191 The flight from Kennedy in New York to Portland had been
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192 uneventful. Ben had chosen to drive the remaining miles to the
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193 coast in a rented car. He thought the drive would give him a
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194 final chance to prepare himself mentally for what he would find
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195 in Cooper Bay.
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196 The drive took on second
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197 <line noise>
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198 The drive took on secondary consideration as Ben continued
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199 to ponder his decision to move. The beat of the wipers taking
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200 away the Cascade mist provided the appropriate accompaniment.
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201 'My move was so sudden, I know it stunned most of my
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202 friends. They just couldn't understand what I was feeling
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203 inside. I was unable to tell them myself. The typical lack of
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204 communication strikes again. I just had to get away. Ten years of
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205 the hustle and bustle and clawing towards the top has worn me
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206 out. I am sick of stepping over others for a chance at the brass
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207 ring.'
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208 Ben left many friends behind. He also left many opportun-
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209 ities back on 5th Avenue, 3000 miles and a world away from where
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210 he was heading now.
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211 'Damn!' Ben had done a great deal of soul searching these
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212 last few days, but peace seemed as elusive as ever. 'I have
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213 forsaken everything I worked so hard for. I am heading into an
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214 unknown, a place that has probably changed as much as I have in
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215 the decade since I left. Have I made the right decision? Can I
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216 ever return to the way things were before? What of my grand
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217 experiment; the local high school wonderkid goes away to school
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218 in New York, and comes back ten years later with his tail between
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219 his legs.'
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220 Ben had been a specially gifted student, a quality that
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221 didn't go unnoticed thanks to the coverage his scholastic
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222 achievements earned him in Oregon newspapers. He won a full
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223 scholarship to New York University. Ben continued his stellar
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224 educational performance while majoring in Business communications
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225 and advertising. The big Pinkton and Rich ad agency snatched him
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226 up upon graduation, and for the past six years he had been one of
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227 the leading commercial writers in New York.
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228 Ben had started to feel 4he burnout that so often accom-
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229 panied the business. He realized he needed a change of pace
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230 from the hurried, never stop life style he had formed around
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231 him. The idea of starting up a small one-man operation back in
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232 Cooper Bay had come to him one night after an especially long day
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233 of meetings with prospective clients. Ben put in his two week's
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234 notice soon after. Despite the protests of Pinkton and Rich, Ben
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235 was soon on his way west, wondering what the future held for him.
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236 'My ideas are sound,' he thought, rounding one corner after
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237 another in the long drive through the mountains. 'I know I have
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238 the skills to help the local businesses all around the area. But
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239 will they accept me? I know I am an outsider even though I was
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240 born there. What will they think of the city slicker come back.'
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241 Ben's train of thought was interrupted by a bright light
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242 coming through the windshield. The fog had broken and the sun was
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243 out. Ben realized he was through the mountains and descending
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244 into the coastal lowlands. So affected by the wonderful tableau
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245 that presented itself before him, Ben pulled his car over
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246 and stopped.
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247 A slight haze partially hid the bay, but he could see the
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248 town, his town, spread out before him like a miniature city in a
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249 picture postcard.
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250 'It hasn't changed a bit,' Ben mused. 'After all these years
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251 it looks exactly like I remember it. The same buildings and
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252 offices dot the same streets I walked so long ago. Everything is
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253 here just like I left it.'
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254 A shiver of excitement and anticipation ran through Ben
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255 Clausen. Overlooking the town from the low hills above, Ben
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256 realized something very important.
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257 'I have come back to the place I belong. I will make a new
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258 life for myself in Cooper Bay. I have been gone a long time and
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259 now I have a lot of catching up to do. I am not sorry for leaving
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260 New York anymore. This is it. I know I made the right decision. I
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261 can come home again.'
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262
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263 Sorry about the mistakes. I just found out about this system from a friend
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264 at school and he told me how to access Backwaters. I hope the upload looks
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265 ok. Does this fit in?
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266 Jane Smith
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267 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
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268 OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI OMNI
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269 "Zeb!" Trainor awoke with a start. His eyes were wide and the pupils
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270 danced crazily, examining every corner of the room. Finally his eyes fell on
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271 the lady now know as Aedem. She returned Trainor's gaze with a smile.
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272 "Cragmore, Emu, Bard, get in here, help me up." Trainor called for his
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273 companions, who hurried into the room and to his side moments after he spoke.
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274 "Are you...OK now Trainor?" Bard asked quietly. "You had us worried there
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275 for awhile."
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276 "We felt obligated to help you out, I hope you understand." Cragmore con-
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277 tinued.
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278 "Did you see our marks?" finished Emu.
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279 "My friends, your caring efforts are greatly appreciated. I was overcome
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280 with insanity, you know the reasons why. I understand now that I was wrong in
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281 my feelings. Aedem and I have resolved our conflict. I am content with the
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282 situation. I thank you again my friends."
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283 Aedem approached the bed where Trainor lay. "I say we leave this place,
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284 now. The Creature from Zeb is no longer. Our path is free and clear." The
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285 woman once known as zeb spoke with calm authority.
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286 Emu looked at Trair. "We can leave, return to the Inn. Trainor, nothing
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287 remains to be done here, right?"
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288 "Yes Emu, please take care of it. Bard, could you go with him and help
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289 with the preparations. Cragmore, see to Piper and Lady Tayre, if you will. I
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290 want to speak to Aedem for a moment, then I'll join you."
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291 "Sure Trainor. It is good to have you back."
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292 "It is good to be back Cragmore."
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293 Cragmore left and Trainor turned to Aedem. "We have been through a great
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294 deal. Our minds have touched and I think I understand what must happen now. As
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295 you saw my inner-most feelings, I saw yours. I know you must return to your
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296 place in the universe. I know that we must not meet again. I know your
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297 journey back is just beginning, while ours is almost over. What will you do?"
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298 "Yes you do know my thoughts as I know yours. You will return shortly to
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299 the Inn, and these adventurers will scatter to the winds. I know you will
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300 scatter the farthest, in search of a new home. I know your search will not be
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301 easy, but you will find what you are looking for. I know that once I leave
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302 I must not return. I will go with you to the Inn, and from there I will depart.
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303 The magic is strong at the Inn, my heart tells me so. I am confident that I
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304 can make it back to my origin from there."
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305 "The Inn is strong. I felt that strength when I first arrived in my Pell-
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308 "Trainor, goodbyes are best now. As distance separates us our souls will
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309 mingle in the stars. Goodbye."
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310 A moment later she was gone. Trainor knew he would not see her again.
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311 She would quickly exit the Pell-mell upon its arrival at the Inn. He tried to
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317 Self styled critic: Let me tell you something about myself. I am a rogue agent
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318 who has been hunted by the U.S. Government, organized crime, McKane, and various
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319 others who want me dead, for several years. So far I have disposed of more than a dozen of them, and there will be
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320 more as time passes. I am trained in explosives,firearma of ALL types, electronic surveillance,and many many ways
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321 to end the lives of those who antagonize me. If I had really wanted to kill the Albanian, I could have done so any
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322 number of times,just as he could have terminated me had he so wished. You say you criticize others because you can't
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323 write. Well, you are about to learn. You see, you have insulted me from the very day I came back to get McKane, and
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324 now, you are part of all this. You better be very very careful, because I'm looking for you, and sooner or later I'll
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325 find you. And then what will you do? WHAT WILL YOU DO? Delta Five.
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326 Wassir: It's your move.
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327 Backwatcher: as I said before... if my *name* isn't part of the border then
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328 it is a marker and has no connection with any text above it...
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331 ______________________Leonard_JD 2446409.9035____________________________
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332 Leonard, I did not know you were Delta Five. Wow!
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333 Wassir, now that we know the true identity of your opponent, will you
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334 pursue this quest with the same ferocity?
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336 HOW AREAL?
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337 WHAT YA' DOING? BEEN HAVING FUN LATELY?
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338 THIS IS MY FIRST TIME ON THIS BOARD SO I DON'T QUITE KNOW WHAT I SHOULD OR
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339 SHOULD NOT WRITE!!!! IM NEW TO ALL OF THIS SO,SORRY IF I DONT DO THJN
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340 T EXACTLY RIGHT THE FIRST TIME. I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW MORE ABOUT THE BOARD.
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341 SO FAR ITS STILL PRETTY CONFUSING!!!BUT,WHAT IVE READ SO FAR IS REAL GOOD!
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347 TTYL!
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348 ME!
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350 |:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|A. M. Ge=
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352 dragging the story out. It appeared to me that you were trying to set the
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353 mood of the character, but (at least for me), it wasn't quite right. Keep
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354 on with the story!
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355 <=A. M. Goer|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|
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358 AM Goer: Why don't you try writing something yourself instead of sniveling
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359 about what others write. This BBS is patronized by a handful of people with
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360 some good writing ability, and a horde of small minded creeps who have
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361 nothing better to do than unwittingly express their jealousy by trying to put
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362 down others. You can't beat us, and you can't hurt us with your metaphorical
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363 sticks and stones, so why don't you join us? If there were more attempts at writing something other than criticism this BBS
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364 would be a more pleasant place for everyone.
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365 .-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.
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366 Jane: another comment might be to shorten your entries. Save some of the
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367 story for later, instead of one long block. Also, don't be discouraged
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368 by any name callers or super-critics that might try throwing a bone
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369 your way.
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370 AM Goer: that last sentence was for you too.
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371 .-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.-.Emu
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372 TSSC TSSC TSSC TSSC TSSC TSSC TSSC
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373 Jane Smith: No one escapes my comments here, especially new folks. The writing
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374 is fine, but your uploads make any thoughts of whether it's good or not moot.
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375 Too many spaces, and much too long an entry. I think you'll find Backwater
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376 readers much more interested in short, to-the-point entries...
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378 Delta V: After rereading (actually as soon as I hung up) my entry I realized
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379 that it was much too harsh a criticsm, and I apologize, because you're giving
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380 it a good effort and you're far more interesting than many. Just looks like
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381 you rush it once in a while. HOWEVER, I'd love to take you on... I lurk in the
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382 shadows and assume many identities, so
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383 you may not always know whether you got the right target!
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384
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385 Thank goodness the Emu Bard etc. people are scattering to the winds, that
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386 piece of good writing but uninteresting story was bogged down deeper than the
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387 dark woods of Ephengel.
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389 As an occasional writer, I have found it sometimes frustrating to put in entries
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390 and have no comments back, positive or otherwise. Therefore I decided to name
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391 myself the Self-Styled Critic in an effort to give the good writers of this
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392 board an idea of at least one person's opinion. I shall always try and be
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393 constructive and positive, but carefully worded negativisms are sometimes
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394 necessary to improve one's writing. If someone doesn't like it, tough, because
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395 it's a free forum. And they can criticize my criticisms if they want...
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396 I just think it's a service that needs doing occasionally, and any good writer
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397 should always be anxious for feedback, good or bad. I shall, however, as mentioned, try and remain responsible and
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398 upbeat.
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399
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400 @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@THE SELF-STYLED CRITIC@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
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402 Jane Smith: Nah, don't believe 'em; they often put toungue before mind. The
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403 entry was a bit long and redundant, but the material of a (dare I say)
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404 wholesome nature, and playable. Keep it up.
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405
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406 Rest: Hope to have story soon; time to get rid of your modems, you critics
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407 you!
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408 PEN NAME /~
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409 ||||||||||||| (New symbol -> /~ Like it?) ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
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410 Self styled critic: What I like to write about is action. Things happening fast.
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411 That is why I bacame Delta Five. I have been other characters here, but Do not
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412 have time (haven't had) time to pursue them. The last entry was typed as I made it
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413 up at about 2 AM the day of a bitch of a final exam. If I took more time, perhaps
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414 It might have been different, but whatever-what I write is what I write. Since you
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415 were a big enough person to say what you did you have earned my respect. I will
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416 shake your hand and tell you that face to face. And then I will kill you. Delta Five
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417 ----------------------------------------------------------------------------
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418
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419 Hmmmm.... Guy could get hurt around here. Hey Martha bring me the
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420 helmet. By the way, Delta 5: Wassir wanted me to tell you, it may be
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421 someone else's move. Just hang tough for a while.
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422 Dr. Frankenstupe
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423 +_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_
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424
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425 !!!Dr. Frankenstupe! Where have you been hiding? Long time, C'est non?
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426 Please thank Mr. Wassir for his reply. If you're out there, Wassir, I'll
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427 bet you lunch at the Savoir Faire that my ankle hurts more than your jaw!
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428 Delta V.
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429 -+- -+- -+- -+- -+- -+- -+- -+- -+-
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430 Doctor! Hey, I thought you'd disappeared somewhere
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431 due to that odd, blinking contraption of yours...
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432 (I still have those entries -- was wondering where
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433 the craetor of that tale had gone.) Hello? Aloha!
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434 -+- -+- -+- -+- -+- -JUGGLER- -+- -+-
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435
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436 pppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp
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437 The piper sat alone at a scarred table, a wounded beast seeking solace
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438 in the shadows. Next to him was a tarred leather container that had
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439 recently contained a rather large quantity of the Inn's best ale.
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440 Within, he contained several measures of that ale, and an inconsolable
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441 grief. The effect of the ale did little to blunt the edge of the pain
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442 although he sought the dregs of the container for an anodyne.
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443 Heedless of those around him, he pillowed his face on his bandaged arm,
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444 the pain of the disturbed wound a counterpoint to the stabbing pain in
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445 his heart. As the tears soaked his neatly bandaged arm, his shoulders
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446 shook in silent sobs.
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447 pppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp
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448 \\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\
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449 """"""""""""""""""
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450 All: Those of you who have read the third book in the Hitchh-Hikers Guide to
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451 the Galaxy (Life, the Universe and Everything) probably remember something
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452 called the "Campaign for Real Time". I think we need something like it here
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453 on Backwater called the Campaign for Real Line Numbers. It's getting very
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454 hard to know where to start reading. For the last few days every time I call
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455 my pointer has been made invalid by all the deletions going on. Since I don't
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456 download everying, I'm not always sure just what was erased or why. So I have
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457 to guess where to start. Anyone else will to join CRLN?
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458 """"""""""""""""""SOLI
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459 NO.
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460 :-)I, for one, think it might be a good idea. Max...:(-:
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461 @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
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462 Franklin Pervis took a sip of the hot black coffee and stared at the CRT term-
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463 inal in front of him. He pondered his cup for a moment- he had gotten for
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464 (it for) Christmas a few years back from a favored niece of his- and now it was worn and colored light brown around the
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465 edges. Just like an old pipe, it had reached the point of perfected usage, where every sip of the warm stuff tasted like
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466 ambrosia.
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467 But this morning was slightly different, even with the down-home feeling of his coffee cup, and the familiar surround-
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468 ings of his workplace. He worked at "The
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469 Daily Ditto," a near-tabloid newspaper which worked very hard to expose whatever injustice might come its way. As one
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470 of the paper's top reporters, he had uncovered more than one scandal in his lifetime. But today, his fingers tried to
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471 disassociate themselves from his brain. Instinctively, they wanted to remain attached to the body they had come to so
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472 dearly love and rely on.
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473
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474
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475 But Franklin Pervis' mind forced his fingers to work, and slowly but with a sureness of will that belied his inner
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476 turmoil, he started pecking at the keys before him.
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477
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478 DO KILLERS LURK IN OUR CITY?
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479 By Franklin Pervis
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480
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481 Dec. 11, 1985. This article is written with not just a small amount of trepidation. For you see, it may be a matter of
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482 life and death for this writer. I am, in effect, risking my life to expose this latest cancer in our society. Indeed,
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483 my life has already been threatened, by a man who claims to respect me, but feels no qualms about ending my life, simply
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484 because I called a shortcoming in his personality to his attention.
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485
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486 The man? He goes by the name of Delta V. His purpose? Apparently, to kill, extort, and track down any number of enemies
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487 with the sole purpose of eliminating their lives.
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488
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489 I must, in the interest of society, find out more of this man. I do not know his real name, I do not know where he
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490 lives. Surely he knows, or will know, much about me. But he is a killer, and he must be stopped. Public outcry may be
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491 the only way. Delta V is a menace to our way of life, and it is my duty as a
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492 citizen of this nation to lead the charge against him."
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493
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494 Pervis leaned back against his chair, contemplating the flickering white letters against the bland green screen. He
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495 fondled his coffee cup, and took a quiet sip. He thought of Delta V, and
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496 wondered when, and if, he might meet the man face to face. His hands shook slightly as he patted his overcoat, whic
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497 was sitting atop the back of his chair. Yes, that small can of mace was still there.
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498
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499 Pervis wiped his furrowed brow, and continued writing...
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500
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501 @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
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504 TSSC - @@@: Perhaps you need a little profesional/literary help; my card:
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505 +------------------------------------------+
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506 | Nick Young |
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507 | Private Investigator |
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508 |------------------------------------------|
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509 | Felons found; Hipsters handled; Con-men |
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510 | crashed; and cold-blooded murderers who |
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511 | end their name with a Roman numeral |
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512 | (especially five) completely dealed-with |
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513 |------------------------------------------|
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514 | and his agent: PEN NAME /~ |
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515 +------------------------------------------+
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516 |||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
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517 <Giggle> This place is getting interesting again.
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518 Juggler: Not lost, just misdirected. Somehow, that story line just
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519 fizzled out. Writer's block, I guess. And where have you been? Haven't
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520 seen your nom de plume around the boards (though I do believe you may be
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521 using another one <or is this your real name?>)
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522 Dr. Frankenstupe
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523 +_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_+_
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524
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525 Juggler: Hello....from Aloha!
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526 ______________________________
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527 __________________________________________________________________________
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528 Scotland Yard, London - Internal memo:
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529
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530 It has come to the attention of the intelligence team that the
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531 fugitive known as "Delta V" is on the loose in Switzerland. The trail
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532 of carnage this man has left speaks for itself. The I.T. report requests
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533 appropriate actions be taken, ie send out agents just as mean and tough
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534 and loathsome as Delta V claims himself to be. If these pursuit agents
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535 can effect a capture, the I.T. report recommends return of Delta V to
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536 the Dublin office for intense interrogation. If Delta V refuses to be
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537 taken alive, facilitate his wishes and eliminate him.
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538 Intelligence also recommends contacting NET for further
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539 assistance in this operation. They have dealt with the Delta series of
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540 agents before and are familiar with their operations techniques.
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541 Finally, funds have been appropriated for the hire of an outside
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542 consultant, a Mr. Robert Ludlum. Mr. Ludlum has also had some experience
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543 with omnipotent agents and will serve as a great aid in the capture or
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544 elimination of Delta V.
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545 ______________________________________________________SH__________________
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546
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547 Jane, glad to see you arrived at the Inn with a minimum of trouble. Don't
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548 say I didn't warn you about the possible comments. Actually the critics
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549 were not as severe as I have seen in the past. Consider yourself lucky.
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550 I hope to see another story from you soon.
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551 French Toast
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552 *************************************************************************
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553
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554 ATTENTION, ATTENTION PLEASE. IT WAS RECENTLY ANNOUNCED AT
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555 THE BLUE RIBBON ROUND ROBBIN WRITERS CONVENTION THAT A
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556 MORATORIUM WOULD BE PLACED ON THE CREATION OF ANY ADDITIONAL
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557 PRIVATE DETECTIVES NAMED NICK. THIS EDICT WAS PASSED IN
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558 RESPONSE TO A MARKED RISE IN CREATION OF SAID CHARACTERS.,
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559 AND TO PRESERVE THE INDIVIDUALISM OF ALL PREVIOUS DETECTIVES
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560 NAMED NICK. THIS ENDS THIS ANNOUNCEMENT FROM THE CONVENTION
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561 . PLEASE CARRY ON.
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562
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563 YOUR OWN LUGGAGE.
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564 \\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\the critics didn't stop Chuck Norriss...\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\
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565
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566
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567 Yeah, but they should have.
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568
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569 Either that, or give him some speech lessons.
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570 Monotone went out with the hula hoops......
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571
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572
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573 ______________________________JD 2446410.9151______________________________
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574 |:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|A. M. Goer=>
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575
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576 that I wanted to see more of the story and that Jane should continue. To my
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577 first critic: I have posted here in the past, though only once. I fully
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578 intend to contribute further.
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579 <=A. M. Goer|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|:-)(-:|
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580 ]]]]]]]]]]}]=]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]
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581 To: All UNDERGROUND operatives
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582 From: UNDERGROUND NEXUS
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583 Subject: NET, Wassir, and Delta V
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584 All operatives not on assignment or who shall finish their current
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585 assignment shortly is directed to investigate a 'Mohammed Wassir' and a
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586 'Delta V', persons who are currently on NET's priority list. Find out why.
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587 Also note: The North American district is heretofore under direct control of
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588 UNDERGROUND NEXUS. John O'Hara shall return to field duty for the duration.
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589 NEXUS out.
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590 [[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[ NEXUS [[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[[_[_
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591 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++)++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++
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592 Lurk... can you believe that the typical Commodore owner can go down to the
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593 store nowadays and pick up a modem for $12.95? Just think of all those new
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594 modems to be given out on Christmas day.
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595 ++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ Milchar +++++ December 12, 1985 at 12:00am ++
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597 I'd really rather not, thank you...
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599 \\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\\maybe they should have but they didn't \\\\\but they won' stop me either\\\\pphhhffffttttt!!!!
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600 (((*)))(((*)))(((*)))(((*)))((( just peeking )))(((*)))(((*)))((( Ripple )))
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603 "And then if it looks like it might be too simple to understand, it
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604 usually isn't. I think I've got the gist it now! How about this one?"
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605 "How about not... I think we've spent way too long out here on the
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606 bank of this stream. Besides, I'm hardly able to view the designs that are
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607 left in the sand now! If I didn't already know what was there I'd be lost.
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608 How about you? Don't you think it's getting a little dark out here?" asked
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609 the pixie that had been my companion for the evening.
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610 "Oh," I commented regretfully. "You are quite right. We have been
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611 talking and drawing, and talking some more for a very long time." I began
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612 to stand to work off the sleep that had seeped into my kneeling legs. "I
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613 hope that I haven't kept you from anything you might have better spent your
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614 time on. I appologize if I have..."
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615 "No, oh no no no! It was welcome company. It seems the band of Inn-
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616 dwellers I was trying to reach left just as I was nearing the bend in the
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617 road. Why, if you hadn't come out of the Inn when you did, I would pro-
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618 bably have been faced with a long return journey home." The tiny pixie did
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619 not seem to have been affected by the duration of the chat, she just
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620 bounced up from her place on the ground and started off towards the Inn.
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621 "Where are you off to now?" I asked as she made no immediate mention
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622 of going anywhere.
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623 "To the Inn, silly! That was where I was going in the first place.
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624 And that is where you came from. If we both go, at least one of us shall
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625 know what it's like inside." The spring in her step gave me motivation.
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626 "Could you tell me of the Inn?
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627 "Why should I tell you now when you could wait to see for yourself?"
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628 The spring in our steps returned as we headed up that hill to the Inn.
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